Once upon a time there was a scary horror doll she just sat well the kids found a secret basement the kids and decided to go in they,heard help me ,help me the kids put their ear up closer and then a crackled voice said don't you ever help her.They did not know what to do so they went to there weird parents and told them and they tried to run away but it was too late to do anything.The kids went to bed the mum and dad said good night little creatures and they shut the door.After a hour they fell to sleep the lights flickered the room walls cracked and the kids woke up a big black shadow walked towards them they were to scared to move there hearts stopped and the dark shadow walked away and shattered like dust so they ran away never to be found.20 years later there mum and dad had passed the police never knew how they passed away Liam and his sister Bethany bought the house and Liam said I remember this house very clearly.They went up in the room and put there ear up even closer help someone said they thought the spirits were gone they thought wrong they packed their stuff again and never to be found in the country.What happened to the house well they broke and bashed the haunted old house.
Walt: this is a fun way to do a horror exspernce from just words out of a book
what do you like about my story and what could I work on to make it way more better?
Hi Alicia its Serenade I really enjoyed reading your horror story and i think i was kind of scary. But your writing didn't quite make sense and the full stops weren't at the right place. But anyways its really good.
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